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DRAFTER
In the storm,
I¡¯m walking down the road alone,
The wind is blowing,
The raindrop is beating my body,
It is so cold, but I still on my road,
I believe that after the storm,
I can see the rainbow.
Late at night,
I¡¯m walking down the road alone,
The sky is so dark,
I can¡¯t see the stars,
Darkness is around me, but I¡¯ll never give up.
I believe that after the night,
I can find my beautiful life.
Spring, summer, autumn and winter,
I¡¯m all through walking on my road,
Warm, hot, cool and cold,
The road can¡¯t bring me home,
Even there is snow, rain and wind,
I¡¯ll never give up my dream,
I¡¯ll go to realize my dream.

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CANDLE
In darkness, you are my sunshine,
Bring light for me,
And give me the colorful world in the night,
But time walks by,
You begin to cry.
Why? Why do you cry?
For you will leave me?
You bring me warm,
You bring me light,
You lost your body,
It made me so sad,
But I won¡¯t cry,
Because you are still in my mind.
I won¡¯t cry,
Because I know,
Forever, you are mine.
i need your conments~~~

I can imagine the feelings when you actrally writing these poems, the contents are very good. To make it better I think it will be nice if could use more words, rather than restrict yourself in a certain amount of words. Also if you could make sounds more YA YUN (couldn';t write in Chinese...), I think it will be much better!!! Nice try~~~
Do your best and write more, I';m sure that you will improve greatly!! Believe in you!!!

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Some English sounds like chinese........But noon of the chinese sound like englishi

[fquote]I like Chinglish.Hey hey[/fquote]

I love this kind of poems so much ,something like darkness and candle light.I long to see that some time I could write an English poem like you,but it';s clear that my English isn';t good enough~~~

when the darkness around us,
when we feel lonely,
when failures beat us,
we know, we are not alone,
for we have candles,
we have friends,
giving us light,
giving us love,
giving us hope!
thanks~~~thanks a lot~~~~! so touching to read your words~~

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one more, still about friendship.
My travel

Stars were shining in the hopeless dark sky,
Gifted children were nearly out of my sight,
I have fallen behind,
With dreams in boundless night,
And lost my termini.
With broken wings birds cannot soar,
With injured heart ones cannot look forward.
In the shadow of the scare to the failure,
Trembling with a bleeding heart,
I stopped and quitted,
Let the nightmare took the place of my dreams.
Breeze whispers old songs to ears of mine,
About someone reborns like a phoenix while others die.
I am the one in the infernal fire,
Suffered for the pain of sorrow or so,
But not the one to die.
You have told me that there will be a day,
The evil clouds¡¯ faded by holy light,
The hell turns to be a paradise.
The spirit that guides me,
The faith that supports me to carry on,
It¡¯s you who brought me these all.
If ever the miracle appears,
If ever my dreams comes true,
That is due to you,
You are the ones who always by my side
My dearest friends.