Jolly 2003-10-11 05:47 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
[这个贴子最后由Jolly在 2003/10/10 10:07pm 第 1 次编辑]
[b]When I opened the door
I saw you on the floor
Under the beautiful moonlight
I cried for you tonight
Stars were shining in the sky
But the tear was in my eyes
You know I missed you all the time
Although you left me alone a long time
I was so happy to see you again
Even I did not think of it--did all of these are true?
My eyes were shining like the stars
Then you suddenly disappeared
I exclaimed your name loudly
But you did not answer to me
I cried again and cried again
I can not bear you leave again
I prefer to dream rather than wake
Because I can not cortrol it
I can only sad,I was so sad
I know I can not see you in my life
So I will miss you from now on
Miss you all the time,miss you forever,FOREVER.
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Jolly 2003-10-11 05:49 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
语法错误什么肯定有好多，没办法，我英文就是烂，请大家多多包含……
威廉姆斯 2003-10-11 05:55 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
会压韵就很不错了
莉莉·伊文斯 2003-10-12 12:15 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
answer后面似乎不要加to。
金色飞贼 2003-10-12 08:40 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
顶上去……
天木 2003-10-12 10:59 PM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
I can only sad,I was so sad
是不是be sad
我也不太明白
金色飞贼 2003-10-13 05:01 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
这句话我查过了，是没有问题的。
Aimita 2003-10-27 01:17 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
[这个贴子最后由Aimita在 2003/10/26 05:18pm 第 1 次编辑]
[FONT=VERDANA]It should be "I can only be sad"
'cause [I]sad[/I] is an adj. :)
except for some grammar mistakes,this is really a good poem
it sounds very nice[/FONT]
JUNEYEAH 2003-11-2 04:28 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
It's really good~~~~
Cindy 2003-12-14 03:06 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
[quote][b]下面引用由[u]JUNEYEAH[/u]在 [i]2003/11/01 08:28pm[/i] 发表的内容：[/b]
It's really good~~~~
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The same.
紫無月珂 2003-12-18 03:22 AM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
应该是answer sb,没有to的.reply to sb才需要to.
还有应该是I can only be sad.
不过这篇还是很棒滴~~
MissPotter 2004-1-13 09:02 PM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
Yeath!It's really good!!!!!!!!!!
I can learn from you!
Edie 2004-1-16 07:00 PM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
这里有没有作曲大师？为这首诗谱一下曲吧
魔法girl 2004-1-16 09:42 PM
To the most important person in my life--Sirius
really good