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[07/30更新]An作文vol.2（造纸厂的问题）

[quote][size=4]vol.2[/size]

关于市民间的一场争论，就造纸厂是否该建的问题。

There's a discussion about whether an English papermaking factory should be built.

Opinions are divided on the question.Some people think building the factory will benefit the citezens.Many opportunities of emplyments will be created.What's more,the factory could promote the local economic development.To avoid pollution,the factory is supposed to bring in new apparatuses,including the equipment for protecting the environment.New theories of management will also be introduced.

The others are totally against the idea of building the factory,thinking that the factory will cause pollution.Noise pollution will have a bad effect on people's life.Giving off poisonous gas will do harm to human bodies.Draining waste water,besides,will pollute the rivers.[/quote]






[quote][size=4]vol.1[/size]

写的是一群学生去野营，同时学习急救。

My classmates and I took part in a wildness survival program from May 4th to May 6th.

The process that we walked with a lot of foods and clothes was by all means tiring. We successfully climbed three hills and swam across two rivers. Unfortunately,we got lost in the forest. So we had to use the compass to find the right way. Eventually,we reached the campsite. All of us were more than happy. We put up tents immediately. We made a fire and cooked meals. After dinner, we learned to give first aid.

I had a good time there and also learned a lot. Now I know how difficult it is to live in the wild, and that helping each other is most important in our life.[/quote]

[[i] 本帖最后由 Annette 于 2006-7-29 12:41 AM 编辑 [/i]]

沙发~~An啊，字好小啊~~

不过~~我发现原来高中的英语作文的要求好象不太难啊……

恩，总结就是，考场作文比较正统，有点严肃了~~但是An写得挺好的~~

啊啊啊啊，看了一集动画片沙发就没了~~~~
今天累了，明天看，亲~~先占楼~~

考场作文么，主要目的是能拿分~
An写的很规矩啊，满分作文了.....

寒。。原来[color=Green]FOOD[/color]后面可以加[color=Green]S[/color]啊。。。。。|||
那个[color=Red][We successfully climbed three hills][/color]为什么不写成[color=Orange][We climbed three hills successfully][/color]呢。。寒。。
[color=Red][All of us were more than happy][/color]这句看不懂啊TAT。。
[color=Red][and that helping each other is most important in our life.][/color]不是传说中要加[color=Green]THE[/color]的句型么。。但是又MS不应该用[color=Orange]THE[/color]。。。
[color=Brown]疯了= =|||[/color]

[[i] 本帖最后由 EmmaWest 于 2006-7-11 09:53 AM 编辑 [/i]]

FOOD后面是可以加s，虽然在PERSCRIPTIVE的语法里讲不通
那个SUCCESSFULLY放在哪里都可以
但最后一句话那个that.....不要更好吧，HELPing是动名词，不是主语从句。。。。（我认为and后面是与前面I开始的平行的话）
这句话最好分开写，要不然会误会的。。。。

总体写的很不错，很规范的作文,一些比较难的句型和短语用的也很好~~一类文米问题~~

咱水平低...一大堆单词...看懂了...就是句子不理解是啥意思...
闪......

To Coco:
是不难，跟初中里差不多，就是遣词造句方面要更精炼些。

To 紫：
宾语从句中除了第一句可以不要that之外，貌似后面几句都要的阿~~。
实际上那句我自己写的都很糊涂，完全不知到底算什么句型==

To lj：
没满分，扣了两分

To EA:
你的一些问题答案请看紫的回复，解释得很好的
more than+adj=very+adj
a most pretty girl=a very pretty girl
就是写“很”的时候用不同的表述方法，使文章富于变化

To 叮当：
基本上咱也没看懂你的回复==

更新了。
大家既要找问题，也要找优点阿。互相促进嘛。

[quote]Noise pollution will have a bad effect on people's [b]life[/b].[/quote]
这里面的life不用变成复数吗？或者是指整个人类的生产生活？？

颤悠悠的我软弱的问了个弱智的问题...

这里就是生活的意思，不是生命啊

还是很不错啊～亲
不过最后应该有个conclusion吧～～

哦，好像高考时是需要的，8过目前没要求的拉~~

天，高考前英语老师让背了50个句子，TUTU第二篇里的句子几乎一半都出现在里面了。

这难道就是传说中的范文？ OJZ

[[i] 本帖最后由 Aimita 于 2006-7-29 10:42 PM 编辑 [/i]]

对了，我问一句，TUTU有给过授权没？

没的话我可以帮你把出卷子的老师给告了~不爽她很久了 =v=

哎？这是虾米意思？

亲爱的…………我一定会好好学习的………………

感觉和我高中时作文的套路差不多
写得挺好的哦

[quote]原帖由 [i]Aimita[/i] 于 2006-7-29 10:43 PM 发表
对了，我问一句，TUTU有给过授权没？

没的话我可以帮你把出卷子的老师给告了~不爽她很久了 =v= [/quote]
啊？
我不记得有句型嘎==用了些词组