查看完整版本: TINA的7年级作文考试的文章（来批吧！）

TINA的7年级作文考试的文章（来批吧！）

我前面有一段地址，自己的地址，所以就不写了。

Dear Yi,
          I am very happy that I got a chance to talk to you, since you are so busy with work. I am sure the summer holidays will give you a break, and you will have the time to read my letter.

          I think Amelia already told you where I am that I am in grade seven. My school is located in Charleswood, a community in the northwest of Calgary. My school has the biggest school field of all schools. When you open the door from the art room and the library it leads to upper field. The basketball post is movable, but they will pay for it if the break it. On the baseball pitch, the grass cannot afford student running and jump on them, they filed, and the reddish soil appeared. From upper field to lower field, grass’s fresh smell approaches to you immediately as you walking down the upper field to lower field. Several sky-high tree along the edge, wind blows, trees swing and leaves whoosh like sand paper. On a sunny day, the sunshine shoot through the leaves, like dappled star shine in the sky. On a rainy day, droplets won’t come down until it forms a pea size and the leaves cannot hold them any longer. There are few bushes on the other side of the lower field, peach blossom bring love, evergreen bring friendship.

         Beautiful, isn’t it? That is spring and summer, when fall comes, this beautiful scene will gone as soon as the rain fall stopped, a lot of the plant cannot survive without water, but few of them survived. Sometimes people need to strive hard to survive too. Not long ago I just read a story, the spirit of the railway, the Chinese strive hard to survive at Canada. I don’t know if you know any thing about Canada’ history, but Chinese were here when the Canadian want people to build a railway for the. Chu is the main character in this story, strive hard to come to Canada, and try to find his father who worked in Canada as a railway builder, Chu’s father told Chu about the whites treat then like a dog, but we can prove ourselves are not servant. On the other hand, we strive hard to survive too. Most of the immigrant at here cannot find an occupation that they did in their own country, they have to do label. Labels are heavy work, low income, but we need to survive at here. We chose to come to here, we should not back up, and that gives the reason why we strive hard to survive, I really like this story.

         The thing I just said encourage me to stud, oh yeah, study. Grade seven sure is different from grade six. Student surround me start concerned about who should be their friend and who should not, they become more mature, from what they say, what they think and what they do. So am I. I have been spending my time on how should I study more than study, because a good way to study is better then study without a right way. For me, I like to study different subject on the same day, I cannot do the entire Math at one day and all the Humanities at one day, I rather to mix them together. And the option are very good for me, I have found that I am very good and theatre or movie scene set, I never knew that before, just like I so good at hockey when I was in grade six even I never played before, option give me more time and chance to expanded my knowledge, and that is very useful for going to university. I put a lot of time on study English, well, that is the most important thing for me now. And also spend loads of time on Humanities and French those two subjects. I sure have some improvement at English that section, I have phone back to my grade six ESL teacher, and she said I have improved a lot on that. I love the candleholder I made in art clay class, I spend 3 whole period on it, follow the correct instruction. After I brought the pot back to home, my parent said it could sale as a very good price. The pot shines under the light, smooth as silk if you touch it, I like it so much. In this year I have found the talent hidden in my brain, and next year will be the time to discover more and more talent in my brain, and the important thing is, use them properly.

         Yi, I really want know what do you think about my school, I will write another letter to you if you don’t reply in a month, since the mail system is so slow.

Sincerely,
Tina

[[i] Last edited by luxiaohui2 on 2005-7-4 at 10:37 AM [/i]]

看得眼睛发花...

"I think Amelia already told you" 应该写成"I think Amelia HAD already told you"吧?

有道理。。。。。。。。。。。。。

我看看。。。。。。。。。。。。。。

说的是,少了HAD无法构成完成时喔!
不错的文章!^o^

上帝啊~~
除了第一句我明白外，别的完全看不懂！！！

[quote]Originally posted by [i]米米tori托利[/i] at 2005-7-1 00:33:
说的是,少了HAD无法构成完成时喔!
不错的文章!^o^ [/quote]

对。。。。。。。

谢谢。。。。。。。。。。。。。

我再看看。。。。。。。

[quote]Originally posted by [i]∮水中鱼☆[/i] at 2005-7-1 10:57 PM:
上帝啊~~
除了第一句我明白外，别的完全看不懂！！！ [/quote]

看来大家都要加强外语水平...

强

就等猫头鹰送成绩单吧

I'm suck at grammars, so I don't really know what's wrong with your essay, you should see my final exam essay, the person who helped me with it nearly changed every sentece of it...

太太太。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。

谢谢精华。。。。。。。。

我自己从来没的过精华。。。。。。。。。。。。

另外，关于语法，我的文章只有第一段的前半部分是被改过的，后面是自己写的。

终于看完了~~~~头晕..............
写的比我好多了~~~~每次写作文我都要搜肠刮肚的想句子................汗.........

字大点，英文不同于中文，这样看不舒服，空行最好。

晕~~看完第一二段，开始眼晕，你们那儿是红土呀？汗~~~土质不好，晕~~~我记得我在美国的时候是黑土地。
剩下下午来看，闪~~~~

[[i] Last edited by Gimeboy on 2005-7-7 at 06:19 PM [/i]]

看完我才发现我的英语阅读退步了（晕~~~），但还是能看懂（众：倒），不管怎么说，这种文章我是写不出来（众：废话），但是我还是要说D（众人晕倒），首先（众：急~~~），咳咳，不要急么！（众人吐血）其实也没什么，本身一点点的话被你们拖的，早都能讲完了（众：还不是你自己拖的，我们都急死了）。算了，就算你们对吧，我说了~~~~（众：快~~~），也就是~~~那个第三四段么（众：怎么？），有几处错误，拼写错误。（某GB事后被人狂扁）

哦，对了还有，这句话我怎么也绕不出来，像绕口令，晕~~~~：
I have been spending my time on how should I study more than study, because a good way to study is better then study without a right way.
咱翻译一下下试试：我已经开始花时间来思考怎样学习得更好了，因为以一个好的方法来学习比不用一个好的方法来学习好。（晕~~~好像，似乎，也许，大概，应该是这个意思，天哪！我翻出来了）

还有还有（众：你有完没完），关于倒数第二段，我很赞同你的说法。呵呵~~~鄙视中国的教育体制ING。还有，tina也上ESL呀？我到美国的时候也上，是English as the Second Language吧？

行了，就说这么多（众：什么叫就这么多？已经这么多了！），行，就算多说了几句吧，呵呵，文章写得不错，小样儿（晕~~~这是哪里话？忘了），行呀！

闪了~~~
Yours sincarely
Gimeboy(Why do I write down this?Shit!)

晕~~假如按我们老师的方法找语法错误那有一大堆，但是我觉得别人能看懂就行，何必……
唉~中国这英语教育体制不好，这篇文章当然很多人看不懂。（限初中及以下学历者）

I have been spending my time on how should I study more than study, because a good way to study is better then study without a right way.

GB，你翻译稍微有一点点问题，特别是前半句。

这句话的原意是：我花在如何学习的时间上比学习的时间多，因为好的学习方法比一个没有正确学习方法的学习更好。

PS。我什么时候说了加拿大的土壤是红的？只要是在国外的同学大都都是上过ESL的。还有，我可没鄙视中国的教育体制，我仅仅说了这里的教育制度！

另外你的Yours sincarely，是拼错了的。是Your Sincerely, 是e, 不是a.

谢谢回复。

PS。那些拼写问题是我在打字的时候不注意，实际上原稿是正确的。

I have been spending my time on how should I study more than study, because a good way to study is better then study without a right way.
这个句子似乎有问题?
我认为语序不对,应该是I have been spending my time on how  I should study more than study

晕~~~我不是说你，我是说我比较鄙视中国的教育制度~~~~寒~~~闪~~~

完全看不懂………卡米欧~~